Why? talk:Hunt Unicorns
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If you're interested, you should add a link to my old penicorn article. I won't do it because it's your article and your decision, but hey. It's Mrthejazz... a case not yet solved. 20:07, 8 December 2007 (UTC)
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|Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Hunt Unicorns||36||UnderUser||Miscellaneous: 5||9/26||longer paragraphs, longer intro, longer.|
|Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Hunt Unicorns||43||I like cheese||Prose: 6||10/28|
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|Humour:||7||I quite enjoyed this. That's a reserved British expression of praise, you know.|
|Concept:||9||Definitely has the originality thing going for it.|
|Prose and formatting:||8||In the main, pretty good. Maybe the odd tweak needed, and possibly some variety.|
|Images:||7||No problems there, it has images, they are relevant. Job done. I suppose an image of a Unicorn hunt in action would be handy, but that depends on your skills. Maybe a unicorn in a crosshair? Or in an explosion? Or in an SUV? (Sorry, got carried away).|
|Miscellaneous:||5||You're right, it has promise. Significant promise, in my eyes. But I think it needs more. Oh shit, now I have to justify that. Er...|
|Final Score:||36||Keep pushing, I sense there's more you can get from this. And looking at the history, it seems you're already working on it! See handful of comments below.|
|Reviewer:||--Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 13:07, 26 September 2007 (UTC)|
Either a longer intro, or a decent sized paragraph before the "Dear God Why?" section might be handy. Maybe a word from an organisation like the Democratic Unicorn Hunt or similar, explaining their desire to increase participation in Unicorn hunting?
Basically, just adding something that gives a bit of variety might help - it feels a bit... listy, to me, and breaking that up with a paragraph or two might make a difference.
Alternatively, ignore that advice and keep going, you seem to be doing just fine so far. I look forward to seeing this when you're a bit further down the line with it.
|Humour:||8||Great on the begining, but a bit more needed on the lists.|
|Concept:||10||Ha HA Amazing Where did you get that idea?|
|Prose and formatting:||6||Weakest point in the article, needs a few checks on spelling and grammar.|
|Images:||9||Brilliant. Pink unicorn needs a caption though|
|Miscellaneous:||10||(Extra Points for the tumbleweed at the end)|
|Final Score:||43||Amazing. Clean up the grammer and It could be featured. Really.|
|Reviewer:||--I like cheese 20:53, 28 October 2007 (UTC)|