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== Pee Review ==
 
If you're interested, you should add a link to my old penicorn article. I won't do it because it's your article and your decision, but hey. {{User:Mrthejazz/sig}} 20:07, 8 December 2007 (UTC)
 
If you're interested, you should add a link to my old penicorn article. I won't do it because it's your article and your decision, but hey. {{User:Mrthejazz/sig}} 20:07, 8 December 2007 (UTC)
   

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This article was nominated for deletion on October 5, 2007.
The result of the discussion was Keep.

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If you're interested, you should add a link to my old penicorn article. I won't do it because it's your article and your decision, but hey. It's Mrthejazz... a case not yet solved. 20:07, 8 December 2007 (UTC)

link score /50 user lowest score date comment
Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Hunt Unicorns36UnderUserMiscellaneous: 59/26longer paragraphs, longer intro, longer.
Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Hunt Unicorns43I like cheeseProse: 610/28
avg 39.5 --- lowest 5.5



Humour: 7 I quite enjoyed this. That's a reserved British expression of praise, you know.
Concept: 9 Definitely has the originality thing going for it.
Prose and formatting: 8 In the main, pretty good. Maybe the odd tweak needed, and possibly some variety.
Images: 7 No problems there, it has images, they are relevant. Job done. I suppose an image of a Unicorn hunt in action would be handy, but that depends on your skills. Maybe a unicorn in a crosshair? Or in an explosion? Or in an SUV? (Sorry, got carried away).
Miscellaneous: 5 You're right, it has promise. Significant promise, in my eyes. But I think it needs more. Oh shit, now I have to justify that. Er...
Final Score: 36 Keep pushing, I sense there's more you can get from this. And looking at the history, it seems you're already working on it! See handful of comments below.
Reviewer: --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 13:07, 26 September 2007 (UTC)


Either a longer intro, or a decent sized paragraph before the "Dear God Why?" section might be handy. Maybe a word from an organisation like the Democratic Unicorn Hunt or similar, explaining their desire to increase participation in Unicorn hunting?

Basically, just adding something that gives a bit of variety might help - it feels a bit... listy, to me, and breaking that up with a paragraph or two might make a difference.

Alternatively, ignore that advice and keep going, you seem to be doing just fine so far. I look forward to seeing this when you're a bit further down the line with it.

As always, this is just my opinion. Others are available. --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 13:07, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 8 Great on the begining, but a bit more needed on the lists.
Concept: 10 Ha HA Amazing Where did you get that idea?
Prose and formatting: 6 Weakest point in the article, needs a few checks on spelling and grammar.
Images: 9 Brilliant. Pink unicorn needs a caption though
Miscellaneous: 10 (Extra Points for the tumbleweed at the end)
Final Score: 43 Amazing. Clean up the grammer and It could be featured. Really.
Reviewer: --I like cheese 20:53, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
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