Why? talk:Has God Forsaken Me?

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Here's my Pee Review, in case you wanna drop in on it:

Humour: 5 Hmm. Well, I have to admit, I did chuckle at the first few lines and paragraphs, but it gets somewhat repetitive. The first paragraph was very funny, but the rest just seems like filler.
Concept: 7 Good job on this one. I enjoyed the overall idea of "you're a sinner and you must burn in hell", but it was executed poorly.
Prose and formatting: 6.1 The paragraphs overlapping has been done to death. Maybe center your images a bit, make seperate sections? It's not that it looks bad, it's just been done a million times.
Images: 4.9 Didn't do much for me. I didn't really get the creepy anime guy picture, and kinda saw the Hitler picutre coming. The gold statue...meh, would've been funnier if photoshopped.
Miscellaneous: 6.75 Averaged.
Final Score: 29.75 You need some more input for each paragraph. One of the the things that makes an article great is when you throw a curveball of different types of humo(u)r at the reader in each section. Expand each joke, change up your style a bit, cut off a few unecessary sections, maybe add a clever image or two, and you've got a pretty decent article.
Reviewer: Saberwolf116 02:03, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
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