Why? talk:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet?

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Humour: 6 Very good foundation, but some work is needed. The general idea is not really being carried out. How about some clues about some dark power play in the backyard of the academy? Perhaps some nasty issues from the Oz period coming back to haunt him? Perhaps a simple testosteron issues with Tony Soprano? Try to mix the actor with his portrayed character and other tv characters.
Concept: 10 Excellent!
Prose and formatting: 7 The text is a bit blocky, and the part that you try to write like you were Meloni doesn't really comes out good.
Images: 7 Perhaps some specifically tailored pictures to do something with the conspiracy?
Miscellaneous: 8 What I really missed was some reference to his OZ period!
Final Score: 38 great idea, some spice is needed.
Reviewer: ~Jewriken.GIF 12:44, 30 October 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Adequate humor
Concept: 6 I'm not sure who Christopher Meloni is. Nearly adequate concept.
Prose and formatting: 5 Actually, inadequate formatting. It's just a big block of text.
Images: 7 Adequate pics.
Miscellaneous: 6.3 avg'd
Final Score: 31.3 There ya go.
Reviewer:   Le Cejak <-> 23:55, 9 November 2007 (UTC)

Why?:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet?

2nd submission after proofread stillt hink it needs oen mroe image but unsure on what to do maybe a photoshopped picture of him beating up Jerry Seinfeld or soemthign not sure working on it, but ehre it is.--Dr. Fenwick 18:52, 8 November 2007 (UTC)

Okay, you gave me a short review, I give you a short review. --  Le Cejak <-> 23:51, 9 November 2007 (UTC)

Not very helpful is it?

Okay, let me review this for reals... Hopefully you'll learn how to review articles, Fen.   Le Cejak <-> 00:12, 10 November 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 5.5 avg of each section
  • Intro (6)

The intro is simply an explanation with a few attempts at jokery. I would say don't get fancy, just explain. Add wry humor, not random humor.

  • The Phenomenon (7)

That was interesting and had humor. Adequate, I would say.

  • Conspiracy Theories (5)

Oh, that went on way too long. You should choose your favorite paragraph and use it instead of all this other stuff. I admit, you're doing okay when it comes to staying away from randomness, but you can't just go on and on about the Sopranos. That stuff about I know what you did... went on far too long, also.

  • Meloni's Reaction (4)

That was a fairly poor ending. I can see why you would add all these random people and place them at an awards ceremony, but it's not funny, interesting, or sensical.

Concept: 6 I'm not sure who Christopher Meloni is, and you never really introduce him to us. He is a mystery man in my eyes who was in one movie.
Prose and formatting: 6 It's almost adequate, however the page is still ugly. It's just one big chunk of text. However, I didn't see any grammar/spelling errors so...
Images: 7 The two pictures are adequate.
Miscellaneous: 6.1 avg'd
Final Score: 30.6 It's okay, and would definitely survive VFD. You should probably delete the parts that don't add anything, like the references to the Sopranos and so forth. Put that second pic more in the middle of the article.

THIS is a proper review, Fenwick. Yer welcome.

Reviewer:   Le Cejak <-> 00:34, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
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