Why? talk:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet?
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|Humour:||6||Very good foundation, but some work is needed. The general idea is not really being carried out. How about some clues about some dark power play in the backyard of the academy? Perhaps some nasty issues from the Oz period coming back to haunt him? Perhaps a simple testosteron issues with Tony Soprano? Try to mix the actor with his portrayed character and other tv characters.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||The text is a bit blocky, and the part that you try to write like you were Meloni doesn't really comes out good.|
|Images:||7||Perhaps some specifically tailored pictures to do something with the conspiracy?|
|Miscellaneous:||8||What I really missed was some reference to his OZ period!|
|Final Score:||38||great idea, some spice is needed.|
|Reviewer:||12:44, 30 October 2007 (UTC)|
|Concept:||6||I'm not sure who Christopher Meloni is. Nearly adequate concept.|
|Prose and formatting:||5||Actually, inadequate formatting. It's just a big block of text.|
|Final Score:||31.3||There ya go.|
|Reviewer:||• <-> 23:55, 9 November 2007 (UTC)|
2nd submission after proofread stillt hink it needs oen mroe image but unsure on what to do maybe a photoshopped picture of him beating up Jerry Seinfeld or soemthign not sure working on it, but ehre it is.--Dr. Fenwick 18:52, 8 November 2007 (UTC)
Okay, you gave me a short review, I give you a short review. -- • <-> 23:51, 9 November 2007 (UTC)
Okay, let me review this for reals... Hopefully you'll learn how to review articles, Fen. • <-> 00:12, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
|Humour:||5.5||avg of each section
The intro is simply an explanation with a few attempts at jokery. I would say don't get fancy, just explain. Add wry humor, not random humor.
That was interesting and had humor. Adequate, I would say.
Oh, that went on way too long. You should choose your favorite paragraph and use it instead of all this other stuff. I admit, you're doing okay when it comes to staying away from randomness, but you can't just go on and on about the Sopranos. That stuff about I know what you did... went on far too long, also.
That was a fairly poor ending. I can see why you would add all these random people and place them at an awards ceremony, but it's not funny, interesting, or sensical.
|Concept:||6||I'm not sure who Christopher Meloni is, and you never really introduce him to us. He is a mystery man in my eyes who was in one movie.|
|Prose and formatting:||6||It's almost adequate, however the page is still ugly. It's just one big chunk of text. However, I didn't see any grammar/spelling errors so...|
|Images:||7||The two pictures are adequate.|
|Final Score:||30.6||It's okay, and would definitely survive VFD. You should probably delete the parts that don't add anything, like the references to the Sopranos and so forth. Put that second pic more in the middle of the article.
THIS is a proper review, Fenwick. Yer welcome.
|Reviewer:||• <-> 00:34, 10 November 2007 (UTC)|
edit More Piss
This is my 2 1/2 time entering this into Pee Review please tell me what you think and give as many suggestions as possible please.--Dr. Fenwick 20:52, 27 November 2007 (UTC)
|Humour:||7.25||average of all sections
|Concept:||9||i really liked the concept, and i don't even watch law & order.|
|Prose and formatting:||6||it seems you overuse 'Christopher Merloni'. try going with 'Merloni' or just 'he' a few times, to make it flow. the 'i know what you did last summer' movie should have all of its words capitalized. maybe more of an encyclopedic tone would work better, rather than saying things like 'us here at uncyclopedia'. this is particularly true in the last section. there are grammatical, spelling, and formatting mistakes here and there, see final comments.|
|Images:||8.34||average of all images
i recommend moving the mariska image up to the conspiracy theories part, and the seinfeld one down to the reaction part, since that is the point in the article where he actually abuses seinfeld.
|Miscellaneous:||10||since i thoroughly enjoyed this article, after expecting to not like it at all before i read it, i award you the maximum number of miscellany points. congratulations.|
|Final Score:||40.59||you've got a good article here, and i see it's on VFH with 11 votes as of this writing. i'd be tempted to vote for, provided some of the suggestions i have suggested are followed (i like to think i'm helpful like that). i would myself fix up things like grammar and spelling for you, but i am very hesitant to edit in any way an article that is on VFH. if you'd like, i could help you out with getting this one featured. i could do a grammar/spelling edit, and then a general edit with some changes that you could revert at your leisure. if you don't mind my editing/meddling, you can let me know on my talk page, and i'll comply as promptly as possible. keep up the good work, and good luck on a highlight.|
|Reviewer:||-- 23:36, 7 December 2007 (UTC)|