Why? talk:Are motorists out to get me when I ride my bike?

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Yard sale? 1234 ~ 16px-Pointy 06:40, 20 April 2011

term that describes a bike/skiing crash ie. crash was so bad that all that your equipment is good for is a yard sale. --Man in the Ceiling 13:00, April 20, 2011 (UTC)
You might want to make that a little clearer in the article, unless it's an accepted idiom... although not everyone's familiar with the same ones, anyhow. Just a thought. 1234 ~ 16px-Pointy 02:05, 21 April 2011
I did the Pee review: Snowflake mini Mattsnow 05:10, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
Humour: 6.5 For such a short article, there are a lot of jokes per square inch, which is very good. A lot of those jokes are producing an entertained smile rather than a laugh. But the spin you put on the title and the mood change after the first paragraph are genius and actually made me laugh. The jokes about "you are probably the guy who broke my grandma's hip" and all are great. The weakest paragraph in my view is the last one. I think it is important to finish strong, especially in a short article. It is this small part you need to work on in my opinion. I would give you an 8 or 8.5 if the ending were as strong on the humour side as the rest.
Concept: 7.5 The concept is great, but maybe I am a little biased here, since I am a cyclist enthusiast. But in the end, everyone feels included in the article since everyone either drives or ride. The idea of delivering the twist with a ==title== (Because you are an idiot) is by far the highpoint of the article. It made me go from a smile to a "What?!?!?" to an even bigger smile.
Prose and formatting: 7 Nothing much to whine about here, except maybe the swearing (I know it sounds weird from an ex-Ediot but I have been told to cut down the swearing by the admins before they nom one of my articles) The fact that you can transition from subject-to subject effortlessy and briefly, such as after the Lance Armstrong paragraph, is very good. Once again, it is my humble opinion that the last paragraph is the weakest, especially the line "plz kthx bi". There certainly is a way to express your contempt upon leaving the reader better than that. and in the formatting matter, the only thing I can think of is that the picture of the stop sign is raping the ==Extenuating...== paragraph line. Maybe move it upwards? But maybe I am being a maniac here and it is my weird personal tastes. Did I mention I like to... nevermind.
Images: 6 The first and last image are simply amazing and made me laugh, their captions are great. The Dennis the Menace thing just does not fit my friend. I mean I just don't get it, even with the caption. The "menace" references in the paragraph to the right? It just does not add up for that pic. Another point where you could REALLY go to improve the article, since it is short. If that image would have been in the same category as the other 2, I would give you a 7.5 at least.
Miscellaneous: 6.5 This is my second review, and I still don't know what in the hell that miscellanous stuff stands for, so I'm giving you the average score of the other topics
Final Score: 33.5 I am a n00b I know, I hope this was helpful. I feel it is an above-average article. I envy you because it is so easy to improve in my view in light of the above.
Reviewer: Snowflake mini Mattsnow 05:07, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
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