Apple (history, logs)

Article: Apple

Score: 7

Nominated by: ShabiDOO 15:34, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
For: 7
  1. If anyone would do a little spelling and grammar correction while reading it I'd be much obliged --ShabiDOO 15:34, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Very good. Sir ScottPat (talk) White Ensign Scotland Flag 1 Compassrose VFH UnS NotM WotM WotY 21:18, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Symbol for vote For. I really appreciated it! Anton (talk) 16:21, July 12, 2013 (UTC)
  4. For. -- Simsilikesims(♀GUN) Talk here. 02:39, July 13, 2013 (UTC)
  5. For. LaurelsRomArtus*Imperator ITRA (Orate) ® 16:44, July 13, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Symbol for vote For. Sir Reverend P. Pennyfeather (fancy a chat?) CUN VFH PLS 11:09, July 15, 2013 (UTC)
  7. Symbol for vote For. Spıke Ѧ 13:04 16-Aug-13
Against: 0

No against votes

  • I would rather vote for the article than against but found out that it is still in need of more work and so I won't vote at all until it is done (if you are planning to work more). First of all, there seems to be only one important joke: about how all the Apple products are actually cookies. Take another look at the aspect, see if you can make fun of company and/or customers with the use if cookie joke but not just simply stating that this product is another type of cookie, etc.
Second, your article is called Macintosh but you tell us about the whole Apple society and products. Something has to be done here, as otherwise the article's content will be completely different from its title.
Finally, you say "as thin as air". Well, than these cookies should be enormous. Air is a mix of gases and the width of the air is several kilometers (the understanding of air as such may vary, as a bit of it is present even far away, but it is at least several kilometers thick). This is from the physico-geographic point of view. I think you should invent another comparison connected to air. Anton (talk) 20:41, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • A foreigner trying to point out that English is a silly language when you actually interpret the meanings of our sayings. "As thin as air" is a very common expression in the English language and whether it is correct or not need not matter as it makes perfect sense in the English language. Sir ScottPat (talk) White Ensign Scotland Flag 1 Compassrose VFH UnS NotM WotM WotY 21:16, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
Indeed, I will change the title of the article to Apple or whatever is available. Thanks for the constructive criticism Anton. This is a rewrite of a rewrite and so I might as well start from scratch if I want to make something more profound and clever. Any advice on how to clean up individual sections of the article would be very appreciated. --ShabiDOO 00:20, July 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • I don't have anymore. That's fine. Anton (talk) 16:21, July 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • I changed the title to Apple. --ShabiDOO 16:48, July 12, 2013 (UTC)
Yeah, well done! Anton (talk) 16:50, July 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • I disagree with Anton's original comment that the article has a single joke; I would say the article has a comedy theme. Spıke Ѧ 13:04 16-Aug-13


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