Battle of Hulao Pass (history, logs)

Article: Battle of Hulao Pass

Score: -1 Coalitioners

Nominated by: Sir Peasewhizz de New York (Chat) (Stalk?) 03:40, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
For: 1

SN+F: My second Three Kingdoms article and nice in my view.--Sir Peasewhizz de New York (Chat) (Stalk?) 03:40, December 29, 2012 (UTC)

Against: 2
  1. Against. Not enough funny in here. Why not leave yourself longer to work on stuff rather than immediately nominating every piece of writing you complete. mAttlobster. (hello) 13:07, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Symbol against vote Against. Totally unfunny Intro (including a tedious pronunciation guide) convinces me I am not in author's fiction world nor will benefit from entering it, despite hyperventilation in the Infobox. Soon after, we encounter another pronunciation guide and a numbingly long list of Chinese names. Whom is this article for? Shouldn't a feature article have something to relate it to the rest of us? What is the comedy strategy? Spıke Ѧ 15:00 29-Dec-12
Wait, do you mean I made this fictional? This is a spork, and not my fictional world. Sam's Empire is my only fictional world story, besides the beginning to Fluff (spread).--Sir Peasewhizz de New York (Chat) (Stalk?) 18:23, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
  • Comment. Pee Review is very useful - and was previously required for self nom. Pee Review is a better place to get feedback. Cheers! Funnybony Icons-flag-th Agnideva-small.jpg AGT-logo-small.jpg 14:25, Dec 29
  • Comment. The whole "the battle didn't happen but here's how it happened" concept is sort of bashed over the readers head. This needs restructuring and a couple LOL moments in my humble opinion ShabiDOO 19:30, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
  • Comment. I think it could be worked on a little more, too. Good start, though. Murder Frog Dull interest wanes. 19:41, December 29, 2012 (UTC)


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