Against. Not enough funny in here. Why not leave yourself longer to work on stuff rather than immediately nominating every piece of writing you complete. mAttlobster. (hello) 13:07, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
Against. Totally unfunny Intro (including a tedious pronunciation guide) convinces me I am not in author's fiction world nor will benefit from entering it, despite hyperventilation in the Infobox. Soon after, we encounter another pronunciation guide and a numbingly long list of Chinese names. Whom is this article for? Shouldn't a feature article have something to relate it to the rest of us? What is the comedy strategy? Spıke¬ 15:00 29-Dec-12
Comment. Pee Review is very useful - and was previously required for self nom. Pee Review is a better place to get feedback. Cheers! Funnybony 14:25, Dec 29
Comment. The whole "the battle didn't happen but here's how it happened" concept is sort of bashed over the readers head. This needs restructuring and a couple LOL moments in my humble opinion ShabiDOO 19:30, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
Comment. I think it could be worked on a little more, too. Good start, though. Murder Frog ✄ Dull interest wanes. 19:41, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
The nomination was not successful.RomArtus*Imperator ITRA (Orate) ® This article did not pass VFH and was removed on 20:28, December 29, 2012 (UTC). This page is now archived; do not edit it, it will have no effect.