Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/tootstain

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Jdock12 11:35, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 1 I didn’t find this funny at all. I wasn’t offended either but I was almost sick. Seriously it’s just too childish. I can see that you made an attempt with the queen but it was just, meh. Over used cliché that the queen is rude, it’s only still funny on carefully written sketch shows. And also it was a little too random. Add to this that fact that there was so little content. It’s just a very poor article. And that stuff at the end about duck butter just about made me throw up. Seriously.
Concept: 1 Euch! It’s gross. And way too childish. Seriously, I don’t think that there is a way of improving this concept and so I’m going to be frank: I think you should just let this article die. It’s what’s really dragging this article down and stopping it being funny.
Prose and formatting: 3 Well I can see some potential in your writing it’s just there wasn’t much of it, articles around here tend to be longer and it’s wise to avoid short sentence paragraphs. Your style wasn’t bad, it had a good encyclopaedic tone and was attempting to be “serious about silly things” and this is why I can see you have potential it’s just the concept.

Also for future reference quotes should be italicised.

Images: 2 You only had the one and the caption was just yuck. Ok calling Tom a toot. Great. But then you went over the top with the period panties and it just came across as stupid. Also it was too small, for future reference pictures should be bigger (around 200px)
Miscellaneous: 1.75 (Averaged your other scores.) Also it’s usually a good idea to add your article to categories, though that’s just for future reference as adding this to other categories will probably be a waste of time.
Final Score: 8.75 Well I really doubt that this article is good enough to last especially considering its concept. I think you would be best to just let it die. But don’t despair! I can see that you have potential; read and re-read HTBFANJS, read it again seven times a day! Seriously it’s very helpful. And after that, why not try rewriting something? That way you have something to work with, usually and ok concept but in need of work.

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Reviewer: Have Fun!MuCal. Orian57 Orian57Talk!Read!PEE!UnProvise!CMC! 23:07 1 June 2008
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