This a new article created by me. It was suggested by another user that I write some new material, and here is the beginning of it. So, am i going in the right direction with this one? thanks. -bobofosho
I don't get it - it comes across more as casual racism than any insightful wit. And what is it - I sense you've got a concept which is (potentially) funny, but it's difficult to describe.
See above. Could be a reasonable concept, but it doesn't seem to have any basis in reality or 'ting.
Prose and formatting:
It's an early draft, so I'll be generous. Maybe make the article more encyclopedic - intro, description, history, etc etc. I'd also try and use fewer brackets; rather, make those comments part of the text as they are relevant.
I don't really get it, I'm afraid, but then maybe I'm being too damn British. Maybe try again once some time has been put into planning and writing the article.