Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/darvill hunting

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edit Darvil Hunting

--Thedave 16:20, 7 December 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 2 i'm not sure what you were going for here, but there aren't any funny bits to this page
Concept: 2 your concept is poorly explained. in fact, it isn't explained at all. a search of wikipedia and google returned no explanation for what 'darvill hunting' is, or even what a darvill is.
Prose and formatting: 2 there are more images than words, you have no capital letters, there is no flow...
Images: 2 these images, while numerous, have no connection, don't relate to the article itself, and for the most part are just really weird.
Miscellaneous: 2 the score box at the end just looks bad, there's better ways of presenting that section. i could spruce it up if you'd like.
Final Score: 10 i don't know what your intentions were with this one. some sniffing around revealed that this was moved from the mainspace to your userspace by everyone's favorite jewish uncyclopedian. either this is an inside joke (in which case it will never survive in the mainspace), it's an actual concept that needs explaining (in which case it needs tons of work to survive on the mainspace), or you were really drunk/high/on an acid trip when you worte some gibberish and linked to a bunch of random pictures (which i kind of hope is the case). if you were indeed trying to write a solid article on an actual subject, you need to clearly explain your concept, get rid of the random pictures, then come right back here for some more help. you can't really expect a very helpful review if there's no way to tell what anything in your article is about, or if it even exists. in conclusion, if you really would like further help, you can ask me by picking up the Gerryphone and dialing 30, and i promise to assist in any way i can.
Reviewer: --SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 22:45, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
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