Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/awesome man

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edit awesome man

Awsoman 06:49, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Not enough content. Flesh out the article a bit more and add some stuff. (discussed below in the Prose and Formatting section) Overall, it comes across as kind of dull, but again, if you flesh out the article it will probably get better. IMPORTANT NOTE: Do not rely on the "Awesome" joke exclusively for humor. Have it sort of be the backdrop upon which other things are written. Be creative.
Concept: 9 A good choice of topic, you might consider renaming him Captain Awesome, so you can put it in the little box for "People named Captain" That's a nice little inlet for traffic. Also it is very much in line with the other pages such as Captain Obvious, Captain Oblivious, and the like, being very self explanatory and a little bit unimaginative. This is good. It also has the potential to be another handy source for quotes.
Prose and formatting: 8 The voice works very well for this article. The slight problem is that the repeated reference to Awesome Man's Awesomeness could be viewed in one of two ways: A Tongue-in-cheek parody of superheroes' powers in general and a clever joke, or a n00b sucking at article writing. Both funny, but I'd rather be laughed with than at. Try to remove some ambiguity from that somehow. A good idea would be adding some different forms other than straight-up Paragraphs, such as Lists, Quotes, Images, and the like.
Images: 5 The Images leave a lot to be desired, both in their number and quality. Just find some images, and add witty captions to them, or request images from other users who are good with photoshop, if you can't make any yourself. Just remember that in this style of article, the captions are more important than the actual image content.
Miscellaneous: 7 You might also want to go for a second opinion on this article. Get a lot of feedback.
Final Score: 36 Just work on the things mentioned above. Build on the article. It has some great potential, and you should take it under your wing and nurture it. Take pride in it. unless you really don't care. then you can leave it on the side of the road for someone to pick up at use to make cutlery or something.
Reviewer: --Dorsalfrog Prime 00:06, 9 June 2009 (UTC)
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