Inspired from IRC, this is hopfully alright - thanks for having a look:)--Sycamore(Talk) 20:17, 1 November 2008 (UTC)
It's definitely at the right level of bizarre. Cheers for not going too far with any imagery. I have to say the martial arts section was my favourite bit. The idea of someone defending themselves with an alleged sex toy caught me off guard in a great way.
Definitely not where I would have gone with it, but then again I wouldn't have gone anywhere with it...but really it's a nice one. Good take on the topic without being particularly offensive.
Prose and formatting:
Very encyclopedic, which is excellent because that's what keeps the whole concept funny and not just pointlessly vulgar. I think that all of the pictures being on the right side looks a bit boring, but that's just my personal preference. Very well written.
Like I said, all of them being on the right side made it look a bit boring but it wasn't too big of a deal. I think maybe a photoshopped picture of a Chinese martial artist practicing the way of the yad would be pretty good. Though some might argue that leaving it to the imagination makes it better--either way that won't make or break the article.
The notes section was a nice touch.
Really solid article. Not much to say in terms of what could be improved other than what I said above. Maybe it could be longer, but I personally thought the length was dead-on in that you kept from beating the idea to death.
While this review may have not turned out to be particularly helpful, this user apologises and kindly asks you to refer to his pee policy-->NO REFUNDS!PaddyAtkinson 03:25, 8 November 2008 (UTC)