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This article needs more work done to make it funny. It seems to relay on nazi jokes which can offend users and even cause them to stay away from this site. However I did like how it could be used as a water heater. Chaoarren (talk) 22:13, August 26, 2013 (UTC)

Humour: 4 The humor is pretty good in a few parts, but is offbeat in some other parts, but is still okay enough to stay in the mainspace. I would love to see the outcoming result when extending some of the paragraphs or adding new parts to it.
Concept: 7.5 I kind of loved the concept so far, but there are a couple of sections that are low in value. Otherwise, it's a pretty good article for the latest revisions.

Moving onward...

Prose and formatting: 3.5 The overall prose and format was okay, but here are several issues:
  • The Microsoft Corporation staff Yusuf Mehdi along with his quote have some mistakes. His name has a red link, and his quote has a typo of "Colladuty" instead of "Call of Duty". Not known for sure whether or not that is intentional.
  • In the Special Features section, possibly it should say it was placed on a trailer, not placed in a trailer (if this is the case). Also, other mistakes in the same section include inproper spacing between the in-parentheses messages, which are the one on the spacing between the word skin as in "Lada car skin" and the in-parentheses note, and the spacing between the word vampire as in "world renowned vampire" and the in-parentheses message.
  • There is a mistake in the spacing of the colon where it is supposed to be like "GTA: Vice City", in the Games section.
Images: 4.5 The image quality was pretty good, but the creative new teaser logo was depicted to be sort of a spoof of the Nazi flag and logo.
Miscellaneous: 4.9 In the miscellaneous cases, this is a pretty decent score enough for the article.
Final Score: 24.4 You did good so far awesome author, and I suggest you should do about most or so of the improvement I mentioned would be possible above. Add some new sections and/or paragraphs, and fix the above errors listed on the prose and format section (or maybe someone else contributing to your page) and etc.; then this will likely be fine.
Reviewer: Newman66 Visit my table here! Contributions My works 16:01, August 28, 2013 (UTC)
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