Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Wurm Online

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edit Wurm Online

MrMad 17:54, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

This ones mine. 24-48 hours--Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 21:25, February 6, 2010 (UTC) One booking at a time, review this first. I'll assume this is an honest mistake, but it is getting harder and harder to do that, focus on what you are doing. --ChiefjusticeDS 22:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Ok I'll reserve this for later--Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 02:06, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
DOne with this now I can continue making my review here, which I actually did start on.--Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 02:45, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
Humour: 3 Alright, when I read the title of this article I thought this would just be about a game that is make believe and full of random stupid stuff. Well it turns out the game is real, but I was right about the random stupid stuff part. I’m not trying to be mean, I’m just being honest.

One problem this article has is too much swearing. Unless it’s a comment, Unbook, quote, or the article is in first person, it’s a big no-no. You’ve used way too much profanity and even though it usually works, it can really turn someone off if that the only thing it got here and can offend people, so kind of lay off the profanity some

Another thing is that I see a lot of stuff that probably doesn’t go with the article. Even though this website isn’t made to tell the truth, it does state in the HTBFANJS that, ‘’’The truth is usually funnier than nonsense. The funniest pages are those closest to the truth.’’’, and I think there’s more nonsense than truth. Don’t just put random crap just because it’s funny, put in truthful things and satirize them, and keep random stuff out as much as possible. If you want to put random crap, UnBook, and Unscripts and other places like that can be a good thing to put all of your randomness in, as long as it follows the rules. And the article should be about Wurm Online, not just something made up and random to make people laugh cause those will get dull over time.

Another thing is list. The thing about list is that many people do not like them because they are too random and/or are rather annoying. I don’t personally dislike list, but some people do, so instead make the list into a paragraph.

Concept: 2 The things you wrote about Wurm Online is what kills your concept. You’re trying to make it funny by adding random things and use a lot of swearing, but that doesn’t work here.
Prose and formatting: 2 There are too many spelling errors and grammar errors. That’s another thing people don’t like as they might think this was written by a four year old. Read your stuff man, that isn’t cool to do many misspellings. To get rid of misspellings, either 1) Use MS spell checker, and/or 2) use our wonderful proofreading service, where someone will be more than happy to check for grammar and spelling errors for you. And no one sentence paragraphs, and absolutely NO redlinks, as those are fucking annoying to everyone.
Images: 1 I’m going to have to say no to all of them, because I highly doubt they have anything to do with Wurm Online. I suggest you delete them and replace them with images from Wurm online if they have any. If they don’t, then make some up in paint or something.
Miscellaneous: 3 My overall grade of this article
Final Score: 11 Not trying to be a dick, but I’m afraid this will not be good enough in main space for very long, as it might end up in VFD But there is hope, just follow my advice and read HTBFANJS. I believe that you’re new here, so an article like this would not surprise me in any way.. If it is your first time, welcome to Uncyclopedia. Good luck with any changes. Cheers!
Reviewer: --05:38, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
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