Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Worst Article Ever
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Not under user but under review. So, smile.
|Humour:||3.5||Generally - I'm sorry, but I see very minimal humour here. But I'll still give an in depth-review.
Opening - Pretty good, started off okay. You might want to add in some sort of thought process in the opening. Just 4 letters can do. "Hmmm..." can be inserted before I know!
Firzt - You might want to make the section titles gramatically correct with proper spelling. It's random and sophisticated with interesting grammar and spelling. Nice section full of memes. But maybe you'd like to remove some of the memes and scatter them at other sections. Or you can take all the memes from the other sections and insert them into this section.
Poop - RANDOM. Not funny. You can delete this section, or edit it to make it funny. These articles require strikethroughs, so you might want to include some. You know, those which say
'i hat3 gurls - racist, sexist, you can do anything here. insult your girlfriend, eat your chocolate. Just don't insult asians. Not funny either, so you might want to strikethrough everything and say "A wizard did it". Alternatively, don't listen to my stupid idea.
la - your best section in terms of humor. I laughed. You might want to include pictures. Maybe File:Old-man.jpg at the lalala section. i don't think you should put lol as it means "laugh out loud". it should be "yay" instead.
pee review' - Make it more professional. Make it gramatically perfect, in contrast to the article. Make it longer, too. And the Misc section should be averaged, so it should be 1.
ending- Make it more drastic. 21 against and 0 for. That's fun. It seems to grammatical and good in terms of spelling and etc. in contrast to the rest of the article.
|Concept:||3||The sections are pretty short, though the sizes are kind of similiar. That's kind of good, because users who use memes have short sections. Like mine. I'm sorry but this can't really be expanded. There is a sort of concept, but I'm sorry to say, that's all you can do. Except improving on my comments.|
|Prose and formatting:||4||Sorry, but the prose is horrible. I know that's the point, but It's supposed to be readable. For example, the first line: I'll became lll. Also, the lalala part seemed too... neat. Serious. I think you just copied and pasted. To make it nicer, you might want to insert more As or Ls. You might want to insert Ks and Ps and Qs. These are near A and L, so it might look messier that way. I don't recommend you use 1337 (numbers). It's horrible. Just say it. Also, don't use "ae". You might want to write "aye". Not stae but stayz.|
|Images:||5||I loved your image. I think everyone loves your image. It's perfect for this article, with Mr.T being a cliche. So "sup foo" does go according to how the article should go. just move the image up a bit to make it look nicer. But there's something weird with the caption: Why does it happen to be in perfect grammar and spelling? It should be like the rest of the article. As gramatically incorrect and as incoherent. Though I don't know what "incoherent" means.|
|Final Score:||19.4||It's okay, but it should just stae as an ordinary article.|
|Reviewer:||07:55 October 9|