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PuppyOnTheRadio 23:12, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

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Humour: 3 3 is probably about average, maybe higher, for these lists so please don’t feel bad. To be really honest I don’t think many people even read these lists beyond their titles. The problem with them is they get repetitive and are full of boring and obvious filler. Yours was no different unfortunately and was full of rampant in-jokes which aren’t funny to anybody. See also UN:LIST for further information on why lists are bad.

Also there were time (lots and lots of time in fact) where instead of being funny you veered into torture porn, which is really not what this site is about. Being less explicit (like in No27 is actually funnier) Hacking out all your in-jokes (Chuck Norris, grues, Russian reversals all that other shit you’ve seen all over the place) and the overtly graphic stuff will instantly make this funnier because there’s less crap off-putting the reader.

However you did have a few good lines ideas in there and it showed some promise. There was a few times you continued on a story and I’d like to see some more of this (further information below).

Concept: 3 well the concept is low because it’s a list. Like I mentioned above I’m not even sure why we keep these worst 100’s around, nobody really pays them any attention.

I think what would give you a better concept (and therefore a better article) would be if you made it more anecdotal, you had a few good ones in there already and I’d like you to keep the ones that follow on from each other and maybe do a couple of other mini stories like that. Or to have a slightly more coherent anecdote have it be a group of men talking about how they came to not be men anymore, you know sharing stories and stuff.

I wouldn’t even try going for a hundred of these anecdotes, aim for 25 at most and then just leave it at that. Even the fact that something titled “worst 100” only having 25 items is a small joke in of itself.

Prose and formatting: 5 Overall it wasn’t the worst I’ve seen but there were still a lot of typos and the formatting wasn’t great, in that the (rather pointless) list table stacked up the edit tabs and obliterated part of the article. I’d suggest just getting rid of it and that should probably sort the problems. Also for the writing that was there it was a tad under linked (sometimes it good to add links just for adding links, they don’t have to be to funny articles).

Also a small introduction to the list couldn’t hurt. If you take the above suggestion introduce the group to us here.

Images: 4 Hmm. They were relevant, but few were actually funny even with their captions. Also they were a bit unevenly spaced; you had them crowded in one place and too sparse in others. Also they were a bit small, generally the accepted size is 200px (which yes, varies but it’s a good starting point).
Miscellaneous: 3.75 averaged score.
Final Score: 18.75 To sum up:
  • Get rid of the in-jokes and shock porn stuff.
  • get a better concept.
  • Sort the format.

Before any of that make sure you’ve read HTBFANJS, I mean it, it helps loads!

If you’d like to thank/ask/insult me about any of this please visit my talk page.

Reviewer:    Orian57    Talk   Union pink 17:22 14 June 2009
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