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Resubmit of my article. Cajek did the first review, and wants to do the second. So please let him do it. OR ELSE!!!! - UnIdiot | GUN | Talk | Contribs - 01:14, Dec 23

Why?:Use a wooden condom (RESUB) FOR CAJEK!
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Okay, then!   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 23 / 01:18)

Actually, I have to take a raincheck right now, but I'll be back tomorrow!   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 23 / 01:29)
Nice, I'm excited my score is already so high! Wow, I can't get over that 0.4! Highest I've seen in a while! - UnIdiot | GUN | Talk | Contribs - 01:32, Dec 23
I've also noticed you seem to be into that necrophilia idea. Very into it. Creeping me out. - UnIdiot | GUN | Talk | Contribs - 01:35, Dec 23
Wooo! I'm a crazy kook! Have fun with that 0.4. You've got 49.6 to go.   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 23 / 01:36)
Humour: 6.9 It's changed so much since... since earlier this morning, that I'm just gonna review it over again.
  • Intro [7]

not much changed here

  • 1 The Modern Wooden Condom and You [6]

that's just a basic explanation

  • 1.1 Woodos: The classic wooden condom [6]

basic penis jokes

  • 2.1 Wood Selection [7]

funny, but it was only two sentences long

  • 2.2 Crafting [9]

not funny, per se, but this section makes the whole article better. It's always good to have a section or two that drags you into the world. In this case, it was the world of Woodos™

  • 2.3 Extensive Testing [8]

I spruced it up for you, so that your jokes shine.

  • 2.4 Woodos Custom Shop [6]

Not as cool as I thought it would be. What about adding spikes? Making them spin... somehow? Glow in the dark? How do they taste? Can I have a condom-slash-cell phone, please? I don't want to miss those important calls. When I'm on the beat, I need to have my condom-slash-handgun to keep those criminals in line.

  • 3.1 More protection [8]

same as last time, I think.

  • 3.2 You feel and look "larger" [6]

same as last time

  • 3.3 Pass it down for generations! / 3.4 Share it! [8]

same as lsat time

  • 3.5 Remember the time... [7]

same as last time

  • 3.6 Necrophilia [9]

personally, I like this section, and not just because I wrote three quarters of it!

  • 3.7 Dangers of not wearing one! [5]

buh? uh? ...duh?

  • 3.8 Defend yourself! [7]

same as last time

  • 3.9 Woodos condoms are good for, well, anything! [7]

that's fine. Elongate this section, please: you could keep going and going on this one

  • 3.10 Famous celebrities use them! [6]

Hmmm, you shouldn't use this section if you're not actually going to cleverly make fun of celebrities. That's pretty damn tough to do.

  • 4 But, still, what about the lack of pleasure? [6]

same as last time.

Concept: 8 The concept is scored higher than the actual humor! You know what that means? It means that you have some more writing to do in order to catch up to your thoughts, I think. Another theory is that you got scored for the concepts in the good sections, and that you have to cut out the bad parts. PERSONALLY, I think in this case it means that you should go back and fix sections that are below 7. Make them longer. That's a problem here: your sections are gone before they really get good. It's so easy to make this featureable, UnIdiot! You just need to keep writing. Especially in sections scored below an 8.
Prose and formatting: 8 I went in and fixed up everything I could see grammar wise.
Images: 9 like last time.
Miscellaneous: 8 {{Pee|6.9|8|8|9}}
Final Score: 39.9 Closer to being VFH, but because your humor score is sooo out of line with your other scores, I don't think it's ready yet. The next time you resub this, I'm gonna pass because I like this article too much to be impartial.
Reviewer:   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 23 / 16:05)
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