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edit Why?:Is my molten steel bill so high?

I think this one has some potential. Any ideas?

Cap'n Sir Ben GUN WotM VFH VFP 05:51, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

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Humour: 7 I found the one liners funny, the paranoid feeling of the story, and even how it parodies speeches about utility bills, but I can't find anything laugh out loud funny in the entire article.
Concept: 9 The actual concept is perfect. Molten steel is never used in everyday life, nobody is ever concerned about. You have a great execution, as you act like molten steel is a utility, not a liquid capable of melting everything it touches. No complaints here.
Prose and formatting: 9 Ellipsis is only for a cutoff of a sentence (i.e.: ALIENS...NEPTUNE...EVERYONE'S DEAD!), so instead of using ellipsis, use a comma. Also, it's $168,000, but I'll fix that.
Images: 6 Two images, one of them sub-par.
Miscellaneous: 7.8 AVGIMISIEIDIDIDIDIDYOURFATHERANDMOTHERIDID
Final Score: 38.8 Class job, it just needs a little work, and it'll be good enough for a feature on the front page.
Reviewer: Sire !! -4- (17:50 01-4-2009)
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