Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Get Drunk

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edit Why?:Get Drunk

basically, I need help working out: where do I go from here? User:Fag/sig

Hands off Cajek, this is mine!--Æ 13:07, 20 December 2007 (UTC)
Humour: 5 The humo(u)r is week. The conclusion is funny, not LOL, but the intro isn't very well structured (see Prose), the body wasn't great, it had a chuckle or two but needs improvement (I liked the "What you need is a thing called "friends".)
Concept: 5 The Road Runner being the narrarator is quite strange. Why not have an alcholic as the narrarator, that would be more reasonable.
Prose and formatting: 3 The font should not be in Georgia. No grammatical errors as far as I'm concerned, but there was a red link. I also don't like how the article is arranged, I'll go into detail about that. Telling people to get off Uncyclopedia, eh, why not tell them to get off the computer alltogether? You can get off Uncyclopedia, but you aren't off the computer. The current intro could be moved to the body, and have an intro along the lines of "Would you like to Get Drunk?..."
Images: 5 No Beer? No alcohol? I'm ripped off. Ah shame, get some
Miscellaneous: 4.5 Avg'd via {{Pee}}
Final Score: 22.5 This article still has a long way to go, but I think that it could be great one day. Good luck!
Reviewer: --Æ 13:20, 20 December 2007 (UTC)
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