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If you have ever seen a science show, you have seen Michio Kaku.

Globaltourniquet GlobalTourniquetUnAstrologer, UnJournalist, shameless narcissistic America-hating liberal atheist award-winning featured writer 07:05, August 13, 2012 (UTC)

Humour: 8 I found this really funny. The concept behind it is fantastic, and how you present it is also well-done. I laughed out loud in the "Everymanese" section, which was the funniest.

The most obvious point I can make here is about its length; it's too short. Having said that, I actually like reading short articles more than I do long articles - but I do think you could do a little more with this. Maybe add some more content to the short 'credentials' section, which has a lot of potential - or in the last section, actually write about a few of his television appearances, before giving up and admitting that it would be impossible to list them all.

You could also add another section in, possibly on his childhood, his personal life, or his contributions to modern science.

Concept: 9 I love this concept. It'd be cool if you could go a bit further with it, as I just said.
Prose and formatting: 8 There were a few small things that needed ironing, but I sorted most of them out myself earlier today. Like most of your works, the prose is consistent and suitable.

The formatting is fine, but it would be better if the article was longer, and I also don't see why you made the section titles so small.

Images: 7 Two pictures is enough for this short article, and both are well-picked. The first image could use a better caption, though. At the moment it's just a simple restatement of what you went over in the intro. In my opinion, you should either say it in a new, funnier way, or make a different observation.
Miscellaneous: 8.5 My overall rating for this article.
Final Score: 40.5 I really enjoyed reading this. Make it longer plz, and I might nom it for VFH.
Reviewer: --Snippy 05:08, November 25, 2012 (UTC)
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