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edit What came first - the chicken or the egg?

Reallybloodymental (talk) 10:21, October 20, 2012 (UTC)

Your article shall be judged as per the rules of the competition. Putting in a Pee Review request is at present unnecessary. --Lord Scofield Stark 15:38, October 29, 2012 (UTC)
Since this article isn't on the list of 30 articles to judge, though it was entered in the N00b competition, I will do a quick Pee Review here. Other judges can do one too, but I doubt they will.-- Simsilikesims(♀UN) Talk here. 20:13, October 29, 2012 (UTC)
Humour: 8 The randomness and listiness detracts from the humor here, but I think you have a good thing going when you deliberately make it more complicated when it sounds. I loved the section about "an egg for an egg", and think this section is well-written. I am not a fan of "poo humor", however, though there are several readers on this site who are.
Concept: 8 An age-old question, so the concept is hardly original. Still, I think its a great idea to write an article on this theme. But I think you took a new angle on this question, so I am giving you some points here.
Prose and formatting: 5 Prose and formatting: You used a space in front of one of your paragraphs, so it looks terrible and scrolls off the screen. You also used lists too much here. Lists are easy to use, but really do not add much humor value to an article in general; they are too easy to ignore for a reader who has seen many similar lists before. Instead of using a list, use a few items from the list, and expand them into a paragraph per item.
Images: 9 Images: Two good images, with great captions. For an article of this size, about the right amount of images.
Miscellaneous: 7.5 Misc: I think this is one of your better articles. Your writing is coming along, but please try to avoid lists.
Final Score: 37.5 I enjoyed this article overall, and look forward to more of your articles in the future.
Reviewer: -- Simsilikesims(♀UN) Talk here. 20:28, October 29, 2012 (UTC)
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