Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/What They Forget To Tell You...
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Go ahead. Tell me how good this is. :P Fist of Judgement 22:10, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
|Humour:||7||I will admit that I am glad to see a well written article, specifically one with a nice snap to it, but as with any average article, the humour is good, but not great. If I had to say what my favorite part was, it would definitely have been the “Santa isn’t real” part. I liked how you took the spin of Santa not just existing and turned him into some sort of monster, specifically the Name Change to make him more “Saint Nickey” for lack of a better term. (On the side note, Santa rearranged becomes Satan… hint hint).
The rest of the article had decent amounts of humour mixed in around, the jokes about making yourself seem smart and “fooling” the guy into believing you didn’t get too old, and was spread decently around.
|Concept:||8||Whooo, what a concept. While I do not think Sarcasm can be placed merrily into this article, you did a decent job of throwing the humour in with its own eclectic spin. While the article does not need too much work, I would suggest throwing in a few more jabs here and there. Honestly, I am almost jealous of this aticle, honestly, I never would have thought of this article (Then again, I don’t do much writing so… bleah.)|
|Prose and formatting:||4||This is the one and only section that REALLY needs work. I might seem like a hypercritic, but these are the errors I could find…
I doubt that I found all the errors in this article, so I would recommend you grab a proofreader from the Proofreading Service, just to scrub out all the offending bits.
|Images:||9||Not bad at all, and all the images are definitely relevant. Throwing in the right-left-right-left helped this article flow, something I was glad to see. The one-liner jokes were all there, which was good. The only problem in this category comes with the last picture (“See what you did?”). The problem is that the reader didn’t “do” anything, and it seems a bit inconsistent with the tone of the article|
|Miscellaneous:||7.5||Avg’d as per Pee Review requirements.|
|Final Score:||35.5||I don’t want to take too much more of your time, so here is what you could do, in a can.
I thank you a lot for this excellent read over breakfast, and am looking forward to seeing this work its way onto VFH (But only after a second review!) Good luck!
|Reviewer:||Warm Regards, Javascap|