Please kibitz while you can. I'm starting the bed tracks tomorrow, and the words will be locked in about a week, when I start recording them. Thanx, User:Tooltroll/sig 08:25, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
Wow. It's probably impossible to make any constructive suggestions unless you're familiar with "The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald." And I am not. So if I made any suggestions, I'd probably end up giving you a piece of lyric that didn't fit the music, or missing the point entirely. That's probably why no one is touching this right now. pillow talk 07:45, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
No rush. I've been busy making silly videos of the band, and don't have the beds for this finished yet, so there's time yet. Anybody? User:Tooltroll/sig 09:31, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
Its as funny as a parody song can be, does sound ok would be good if it had a "Devil went down to Georgie" feel to the song, would get a higher rating from me in that case.
There's no song attached, other than that the concept is good and its original. If you get the song up bump it back on here.
Prose and formatting:
Not really anyway your own lyrics can be incorrect.
Could use more pictures, 1 per verse maybe, 100px?
I like it because it's different.
It looks like this is going to be good when its finished, as for lyrical suggestion, perhaps an air of innuendo rather than blatent elicitness would make it more funny but its all preference. Hope you get it done soon.