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At the time of adding this to the queue, I've only completed up to the end of European Renaissance. Don't bother going through the whole lot yet, or the lack of images - it'll come in time.                               Puppy's talk page05:40 10 Apr

I feel like picking apart an article... even a semifinished one. -Grammarnazilogo Fe+3 AlFe+2
Humour: 9.67 As always you do a smashing job writing. Here's what I though section by section.
  • Intro Good introduction of what is to come with a healthy shovel-full of nonsense thrown in.
  • Prehistory Maintained a serious tone with slight nonsense tossed in. Religious criticism seems fairly on track.
  • Antiquity I'm going to assume that you meant to screw up the 5 age 3 age system for humor's sake. Table is legit and I applaud the length gone for a JB joke.
  • Axial age Second paragraph is a fragment and doesn't make sense.
  • Regional Empires How very true.
  • Europe Gold! Especially the caesar jokes- very clever in my opinion.
  • Asia Han did it solo... me gusta. I appreciate the use of redlinks- you almost had me criticizing you because of it but then I caught the humor.
  • Americas Appropriate shortness.
  • Declines and Falls Stayed close to real history but blurring the lines a bit. Good.
  • Middle Ages Well thought out and realistic description/summary of the crusades.
  • European Renaissance It's okay- With all the things that happened during the renaissance I think that this section could be expanded upon. I would like to see something appear about da Vinci's code or a conspiracy of sorts.
Concept: 10 A comprehensive history of the world is an essential article. I applaud you for doing it.
Prose and formatting: 9 Formatting looks good... fix the fragment in axial age and it's good to go.
Images: 0 The table helps root the article in reality a bit. Lack of images noted- I do hope they come in time (i.e. for Christmas).
Miscellaneous: 9.55 I'll just average the scores... the ones that can be that is.
Final Score: 38.22 It should be noted that this review only goes up to European Renaissance. Absolutely fantastic job! I'm looking forward to reading it when it is finished.
Reviewer: Grammarnazilogo Fe+3 AlFe+2
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