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This is titled HowTo:Make a Racist Laugh. The article itself isn't racist, but it did does use the N-word alot. If that offends you, please don't review it. --Mnbvcxz 18:31, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

Mnbvcxz 18:31, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 4 I was going to give it a 5, but upon reading it again, I find I'm tripping over too many niggers to find the jokes. The setup and punchline work, but you've got to get rid of some of those niggers, they're stinking up the place! If you're trying to take it right through funny, into absurdity, and through to funny again, I get it; but you overshot the second funny and ventured into the ridiculous. They just seem random when they're that thick. The Wilde thing is getting tedious, too.
Concept: 7 I really like the concept, but it's a fine line to hit, being right on the edges of funny and offensive. Perhaps if you spread the love around and did an example paragraph each on niggers, spics, kikes, ragheads, honkies, chinks, frogs, krauts, fags, fatties, blondes. . . not just racism, but other -isms and prejudices.
Prose and formatting: 5 Again, I can barely see the words through all the niggers. It almost looks (except for the setup and punchline) like a copy/paste of a wiki article with random niggers inserted randomly at random, often with little regard for grammar. Keeping that in mind, I saw no glaring spelling mistakes, but some extra commas sprinkled here and there would help some of the sentences flow.
Images: 5 Meh. Random and Wilde. For all that, the captions work, and the poses vs. placement in the article seem sensible and encyclopedic.
Miscellaneous: 6.3 An extra point for effort. This could work, with a lot of, well, work.
Final Score: 27.3 Keep plugging at it, maybe find someone to collaborate with, to give you another perspective on it.
Reviewer: User:Tooltroll/sig 14:35, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

It was a copy and paste. I was aiming at being overwhelming to the point the the reader notices its a joke. In hindsite, I probably over-shot it. --Mnbvcxz 15:12, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

Yeah, I kinda figured that's what you had in mind. As I said, I think the concept is workable, but finding the right balance could be tricky. Then, there'll always some folks that'll just go up in flames at the sight of the "N" word (or any other racist epithet) but, fuck 'em if they can't take a joke. IMO, people who get offended at every possible opportunity are just manipulative attention-seekers, and most people should be able to laugh at themselves and/or their friends. Hell, my old lady is a klutzy blonde fatty, and one of my best friends is a nigger fag; but they know all the best (and some truly tasteless) jokes about their respective stereotypes. Hope you can get it to work! User:Tooltroll/sig 15:37, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
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