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It failed at PLS. is it that bad? SIRE FREDDMOOSHA Flag of Egypt AMUSE ME 05:46, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

flyby first off, I'm assuming User:Mahm00shA/Nile (band) is the proper link.

Basically, the problem is that the article is about a band most people have never heard about. When you write about obscure subjects, generally try to give enough information so that a reader who is unfamiliar with the subject can follow it.

Since I don't know anything about the subject, I'm not going to do a full review of it. However, there are some formatting mistakes I can point out.

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  • never put your own name in an article
  • try to avoid red links whenever possible
  • you might want to break the paragraph in the "History" section in two.
  • you article is a bit header heavy. It might look better if you replace all the level two headers (ie. == Title == ) with level 3 headers (ie. === Title === )
fine, thanks :) Colour Sig For Make Mahm00shA Look Cool Egypt_orb_spinning.gif 11:18, 6 May '09

Review Pending --LongLiverh3 05:33, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 3.5 Hi, Mahm00sha. It seems this article has been on Pee Review for quite a while. Do not fear, I got this one.

Discovery: 5/10

This is a decent start to the article. The humor wasn't there, but it fit into the article great. I would reccomend making this section a bit longer, that would help. Also, I wanna say get rid of the Oscar Wilde quote, it was stupid and unfunny.

Prose and formatting:
Final Score: Expression error: Missing operand for +.
Reviewer: LongLiverh3
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