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I've been busy with life but finally found the time to finish this small idea I had. Obvisouly I haven't come up with any awesome "news" title yet and if ya have any ideas thy're welcome. Other than that, I like my concept but aint sure if I managed to write anything remotely good about it. Let me know eh ;) --kit 17:44, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

P.s the article can be found HERE (if any admin knows why it wont link automatically plz correct it, cheers)

Humour: 7 Interspersing the silliness of the, er, victims with the gravity of a murder makes for happy chuckles all around. You could stand to throw in a bit more, though, and cut the HHGTTG reference since it's rather out of place.
Concept: 8 Decent concept, I rather like the usage of taking an extremely whimsical and light-hearted topic and running it dark.
Prose and formatting: 7 Hm. A few spelling errors, and kind of clunky at times (for example, near the start when shifting to the moment of silence) but other than that it flows solidly. Er... not saying it flows like a river of bricks. That was a horrible mixed metaphor, I'm sorry.
Images: 4 The images to explain what exactly these things are, for those who hadn't guessed, but they really clash with the tone of the article and take away from the humour. Try to find some that are deflated or damaged or such things, to really impart the vision of TERRIBLE TRADEGY.
Miscellaneous: 8 What can I say? I'm a sucker for silly things handled seriously.
Final Score: 34 Good start for an article, but needs some work and some new images. Don't fret, you've still done better than a lot of contributors to the site, but work on it a bit more.
Reviewer: Ж Kalir, Awesome Author(alliteration affords additional awesome) 19:59, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
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