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Yeah, so this is pretty much my article. I have to fix that link because it goes to mainspace. Review this article NOW.

GiratinaOriginForme |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Aussie CUN|IC Kill 800px-Flag of the Philippines svg | 09:07, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

I'm not a reviewer, but here's what I think.
First: this article about a character from Sonic the hedgehog, I guess? I don't know much about that animation, really, but I recall watching a couple of episodes back in the days.. I think you should alter the intro to properly introduce the character to the folks who don't know her.
Second: The article is pretty solid and well written, with good images, good formatting and no typos as far as I checked. However, the concept itself is not strong, I'm afraid, and I don't think this is featurable. I might be wrong, but Sonic The Hedgehog stuff is not very popular with many regulars here. That doesn't mean that the article is good, it IS good, though a bit short, I must say, and you should expand it a bit.
Third: You should remove the references to Chuck Norris and other memes, it's kind childish, you know...
That's my opinion, and I didn't use the PEE table so that somebody else can do a more in-depth review of it.. Finally, good job and cheers :) Colour Sig For Make Mahm00shA Look Cool Egypt_orb_spinning.gif 10:24 June 27 '09
P.S. Try posting it to User:Hyperbole/VFG to get some feedback
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Humour: 5 I believe this aricles has a good concept, but its a bit short. You should probaly write about the games she is in and what she do in them. And in the informaion box instead of saying her primary weapon is unarmed, say that her primary weapon is here fist and wit. And don't put a link to weak if your saying she is strong, cause that will really cause confusion and saying she has a secondary weapon doesn't make since if she doesnt have a primary weapon.

Biography and Characteristics Think it should be seperated into two sections instead of one, but this is up to you

And I think you put section that explains her personal or current life (or both) but this is also up to you

Concept: 6 The concept is ok, but needs to be expanded.
Prose and formatting: 7 The I see a couple, and I'll point them out and put the correct way to spell them: Wuith should be With, self-centred should be self-centered, ripoff should be rip-off, and whcih should be which. I don't speak japanesse so I will assume the Japanesse name is corrct. Don't be embarssed I do make spelling errors too. That why Its best to look up mistake in Microsoft Word or have it Proofread.
Images: 8 Good, they support your article well. Although I think you should add more like have a image of her in combat.
Miscellaneous: 7 I say its pretty good.
Final Score: 33 I love Sonic the Hedghog characters (Shadow is my favorite) and I only played one game wih rogue the bat in it. This just need sme work. If you have any questions, ask on my talk page. Cheers!
Reviewer: --Iwillkillyou 333 TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 02:34, 2 July 2009 (UTC)
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