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Finished this one faster than I expected. Let me know what you think. Jackofspades (talk) 06:54, 18 June 2011

Was this the one you wanted me to review? And is it based on something from Portal 2? Because I still haven't played that. 1234 ~ 16px-Pointy 09:16, 18 June 2011
This is about Fallout 3.--White Toaster Talk - Contributions 14:08, June 18, 2011 (UTC)
Never heard of it. 1234 ~ 16px-Pointy 14:09, 18 June 2011
Humour: 5 I am a huge fan of the Fallout series, and I do get all the references to Fallout 3, but people who aren't familiar with the game aren't going to see the humor. Another problem is that you're making a parody of a song that's already humorous: would you make a parody of Amish Paradise? You shouldn't, because it's just too redundant, and is too derivative of the source material to stand up on its own right. If you were making a parody of a serious issue, or a song that wasn't intended as a parody already, it would be funny, but making a satire of something already funny completely misses the point.

The intro was funny though. Poor Mrs. Neeson. It might be insensitive to some people, because Liam Neeson's actual wife (Natasha Richardson) died in a skiing accident in 2009.

Concept: 4 As I already said, I don't like how you made a parody of an already funny song; the purpose of a parody is to expose the flaws of something, and making a parody of something humorous is no fun at all. The one good thing is that Fallout 3 is an interesting game, and ripe for parody. Unfortunately, that was released (as of the date of this review) 2 1/2 years ago; satires are very topical, and can get dated.
Prose and formatting: 7 I didn't see any glaring grammatical errors, so that's a plus. Also, the format looks nice, and isn't clunky. Though I normally wouldn't recommend centering the text, it looks okay in this article.
Images: 6 The images were okay, but the captions weren't very funny. The first and second ones were quite simple, and the third was a crude sexual innuendo. Also, technically speaking, the Super Mutants are asexual, and can't reproduce, despite what Marcus said in Fallout 2 about getting the "juices flowing again". The previous sentence has nothing to do with the scoring of the images, I'm just trying to show off my knowledge of the Fallout universe in a poor attempt to seem intelligent.
Miscellaneous: 3 Sorry, but I'm not a big fan of parodying already funny things.
Final Score: 25 It's almost as good as it possible could be in my eyes; the only way to improve this article while keeping the core concept is to record you (or someone else) singing it and uploading the mp3 to Uncyclopedia.
Reviewer: --White Toaster Talk - Contributions 22:17, July 5, 2011 (UTC)

If you didn't like the review, I'm terribly sorry; I'm not really much of a reviewer.--White Toaster Talk - Contributions 22:17, July 5, 2011 (UTC)

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