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edit User:Iwillkillyou333/Selena Gomez

A work in progress.--Iwillkillyou 333 TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 05:48, June 8, 2012 (UTC)

I'm still working on the review. --Qzekrom sig trans Sir CuteLatiasOnTheRadio [CUNPBJ'12PLS(0)] 18:02, July 17, 2012 (UTC)
I hope this satisfies you. --Qzekrom sig trans Sir CuteLatiasOnTheRadio [CUNPBJ'12PLS(0)] 18:07, July 17, 2012 (UTC)
Humour: 6 Pretty good, what you have so far. I would suggest adding a running joke to add some flavor, because being hot isn't the best one you can think of, I'm sure of that.

In the lede, you mentioned that Selena is "the Disney version of Miranda Cosgrove." You even link to the article on Miranda. However, you don't mention Miranda again until the "VS." section, which, frankly, isn't the greatest effort you can put into a faceoff and really should be made into a running gag. An example would be to say that Selena and Miranda used to be best friends until Miranda had sex with some guy Selena liked. Perhaps Miranda is jealous of Selena for her magical powers and tried to sue her once for... I don't know, trademark infringement of a character she played once.

Concept: 7 A lot of the jokes are centered around Selena's cuteness. (Which is true.) I think that comparing her to Miranda Cosgrove seems to be the kind of thing you'd make into a running gag since it's a great concept in and of itself. See above.
Prose and formatting: 6 Can you write a little more? You're off to a good start. I didn't see any mechanical errors, but you did say Gomez twice in a row in the lede. (I just fixed that, along with a little bit of minor stuff.) Make sure to fill in this section, though!
Images: 8 Images are okay (an understatement). The first photo is a perfect fit for the article and you should not touch it, except for putting it in an infobox of some sort. Also, it's unclear who's who in the "vs." image. Consider putting (right) or (left) at the end of the caption for that pic.

As I always say, please be aware that you're not violating any copyrights by including these images (which you aren't). If you think you are, go to RadicalX's Corner for original artwork. But seriously, go to RadX anyway.

I think you should use an HTML or wikitext table instead of an image, as this is easier to cut-and-paste and loads much faster. Talk to me if you want to know how to create a wikitable. I won't penalize you over an extra 24K of downloads, however, as my connection currently offers 54 Mbps.

Miscellaneous: 7.8 Averaged all of the above, then added one because this article has potential.
Final Score: 34.8 Overall, I really have faith in your article and believe it has potential to become, at the very least, a mainspace article within the next two months. Keep at it, and happy editing!
Reviewer: --Qzekrom sig trans Sir CuteLatiasOnTheRadio [CUNPBJ'12PLS(0)] 18:28, July 17, 2012 (UTC)
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