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Hmmmmmmmmm. Thoughts? Tinymasaru.gifpillow talk 18:26, 12 August 2008 (UTC)

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Never heard of 'em, but that probably won't matter   Le Cejak <14:40, 13 Aug 2008>

Humour: 9.3 avg of each of those section thingies
  • introduction -9- Classic Hyperbole with that "I wanna sex you up" thing. Good intro and everything, so why not a 10? It felt a little short, I guess. Aw, I dunno, it wasn't THAT hilarious I guess. Hey, I'm not gonna write a huge essay for ya!
  • Origins -10- So I was thinking, "how could I give him a 9 instead of a perfect 10? Maybe the formatting looks weird, but that's okay." Right about now I'm wondering why this is still in namespace, Hyperbowl. I think that that was a perfect amount of social commentary (they would color him black because that's his skin color, and not "badd" because "badd" isn't a color) and hilariousness (fad vs. meme) in that section. But now I got my hopes up, and I'm gonna score the next sections really low because they don't measure up.
  • The 1990s -10- Then I'll take off all your clothes... So I can find out what's under there! (This isn't a very useful review, is it?) So, anyway, this section was funnier than your other one, but I can't give elevens: I just CAN'T!
  • Decline and breakup -8- I liked the "Johnny J., break it down" thing, and everything else. Fine ending, there.
Concept: 9 me: "Oh, another band article. Hey, this is pretty funny, and I've never heard of these people before!" I've said that to myself plenty of times in the past. This is a great article, though, if a little short. One major quibble: Could you write some hilarious profiles on each of the (3?) band members? How they all come from places named "Canton" or something for no reason, and how they all got strung out on lame drugs like pot (paint? WD-30? Dish soap?) and got beaten up by groupies, are all directions I would take the article in if I were writing this. If you did that: easy VFH. In fact, it may be VFH worthy right now, but why not put in the extra effort? Have you noticed that, the more VFH's you get, the easier they are to get?
Prose and formatting: 6 The "origins" section was kinda one-liney, and the article itself was really too short. The prose was above average overall, but I had to dock points because, although the jokes are Hyperbowl quality, there's not enough of them. Make the article longer, I guess I'm sayin'. My thought on profiling the singers may be one direction you could go in.
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Images: 8 sure, images, yeah.
Miscellaneous: 8.1 {{Pee}}
Final Score: 40.4 great article, and it's obviously ready for mainspace. ...but it would be nice if you added some stuff. I, uh, hope this was kinda helpful: it's easier when the article is shitty to give advice, but this was tough.
Reviewer:   Le Cejak <15:04, 13 Aug 2008>
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