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This is my second ever article, and my first UnNews.
I'm not sure what sort of feedback I expect. I wrote this UnNews with the intent of teasing those individuals who decided to remove the Random Article link. The joke is only going to be funny to other Uncy users, so I know my score drops quite a bit as an 'in-joke'.
I guess I'd like to know if the article is acceptable at all. Does the fact that I have a point in writing make it bad? Do you like the Travolta with bewbs pic? Is it worth completing, or will it just get huffed?
- But special:random is still there. It's now "free euroipod". ~
05:20, Feb 28, 2010
- I found that out after I first created the UnNews article. I updated the article with a Euroipod section. I didn't want to give away the joke, so all I put in this final section was the word, "Profit". I think there's still a reason to have the UnNews article, perhaps even more now that I know about the Euroipod thing. It's all so very random.--Dbtng 19:24, February 28, 2010 (UTC)
Dbtng 08:13, February 26, 2010 (UTC)
- I'll review this at some random moment in the next 24 hours. WHY???PuppyOnTheRadio 03:46, March 1, 2010 (UTC)
|Introduction to your reviewer
I like to introduce myself to my reviewees so you'll know how unqualified I am. I was named RotM, so some people think I don't totally suck. On the other hand, some people think I do, and I honestly didn't notice that Uncyclopedia had dropped the random link function. That's too bad, as I used it a lot when I first got here. I think it would be cool to have one, so I wonder why they dropped it.
|Concept:||8||I think the concept's fine; Uncyclopedians can no longer click a random link which is Big News.|
|Prose and Formatting:||7.5||I put Humour comments in with P & F, but do score them seperately.
I like a lot of your wording--I would score this higher based on what's here. But I do think it could be improved with just a little more, which is why I scored this a little lower than I would have otherwise. And do have a few other suggestions.
The main thing I'd like to see, in addition to what I mentioned about Euroipod, is more. I don't think this article needs to be much longer, but a bit more might be good. Maybe some comments from some imaginary uncyclopedians (or real ones, for that matter). I don't mean quotes at the beginning, but in the article like the people are being interviewed.
Also this being insidey might lessen a chance of it getting featured, but I don't think it takes away from the article itself.
|Humo(u)r:||7.5||See my comments above. I'd like a bit more humour.|
|Images:||5||Sorry but I don't care for the image or the caption. To me, it doesn't really seem to fit. Maybe a picture that shows something that really is random, like dice. A funny picture of dice might be even better.|
|Miscellaneous:||7||Average of above.|
|Final Score:||35||I think you have the beginning of a fine article. I'd like to see it expanded just a little, and a different image used. Good start!|
|Reviewer:||WHY???PuppyOnTheRadio 02:23, March 2, 2010 (UTC)|