Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/User:Bobofosho2/Ventura, CA
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|Humour:||1||I didn’t find anything humorous about this article - At all.
|Concept:||0||The idea sucked. I think you might be better applying your time elsewhere, the concept isn’t funny to begin with.|
|Prose and formatting:||3||Your main issue might be the parentheses. You need less of them. Also, run-on sentences are a no-no. There’s this rule that basically says ‘all or nothing’ in reference to capitalization. There are some words, we don’t capitalize in headers…Like ‘the’ for example. But mostly, if you’re going to make some things all caps, you’ve gotta do it with everything else, too.
As for formatting, you’re having issues with ugly text. I’m seeing a lot of blocks of text that are aren’t very nice looking. So you might want to fix that to make it easier on the eyes.
|Images:||2||I have this distant feeling you tried to find relevant pictures. These ones, however, were not it. I think I see some semblance of hiding relevance somewhere…If only they were funny, though. All in all, I think you need some pictures that make a bit of sense with article, and have some humor value.|
|Miscellaneous:||1.5||This is an average of your other scores, basically.|
|Final Score:||7.5||Sorry to say this, but I feel like this article is a waste. Something that will be deleted in a few days. It might be worth your while to apply your time to a different concept, with hopefully better results. Good luck.|
I gotta say, I didn't think this was so bad. It's an interesting way to approach a town article, and the style alone makes me chuckle a bit. OK, so it does feel random here and there, but this is a massive improvement on your previous stuff, Bobofosho, and a real step in the right direction. Reviews are a matter of opinion, of course, but I'd have scored this significantly higher - you might want to get a second opinion there. --UU - natter 09:32, Jul 17
- Agreed. It's an interesting and unique take on a town article. My first suggestion would be to put in a bit of film noir lingo, "dames" and "joes", that sort of thing. The pics aren't that great and the captions that go along with them don't help at all. Other than that, just polish it up a bit and I think it's mainspacable (is that a word?). -OptyC Sucks! CUN17:17, 17 Jul