Very clever; how funny it is: I can't really say. It's a very well handled "satire" of racism from kind of Steinbeck style setting. Scripts are functional pieces for actors and directors; with this in mind Unscripts is a difficult medium to create humour and very few writers succeed. I think more parody/humour could be created with a first person monologue; the oblivious Remus would be better suited to retelling his encounters for comedic effect rather than the script format, the other characters responses could be better highlighted that way
The concept is superb and really breaks the mold. If it were to get featured it would set a precedent for the site (I think). It rips into an ideology well, and highlight ignorance and possibly Masochism within it-I've done a similar article and know this is very difficult to do so my hats off to you
Prose and formatting:
I'm on the fence with the script formatting, it detracts from the messages of your article. Similarly the often brisk scenes look so distant from actual Script/Play style writing, and this aspect looks shoddy. Certainly condense these at the very least; it would drastically improve the piece. It needs a good proofread and obviously unintentional typos are throughout. I also would consider the accent style here, you shift abruptly from the Deep South to more modern prose- I would let your inner Tennessee Williams flow though this one, it'll look more coherent and add to the distinctive style and them of the piece if all the characters had a similar accent with specific allusions of Remus' ethnicity.
Nothing especially to complain about here, but nothing to shout about, I would consider getting more images that set the scene a little more. It's not in (my opinion) a serious factor and I would shift concentration toward the writing and the style of the piece. I would also move the one at the bottom further up, it looks good.
This is a very original article; I think it could come to be one of the top five pages on the site if you make some changes. I would not change the story or themes, just how you convey them.
I hope this has been a helpful review and you keep up with this article:)