My first solo venture into unscriptland. Opinions??? --THE 14:58, 19 July 2007 (UTC)
||I laughed all the way through it.
||Very nicely done. At the beginning, I thought the premise might wear thin by the end. However, the
|Prose and formatting:
||Well written; a little proofreading might help. As a minor point, I'd use square brackets instead of round brackets when you're breaking dialog to describe action, but maybe that's just me.
||The miscellaneous aspects of this script are pretty damned miscellaneous if you ask me.
||I love this article. Find some suitable images, and I think you've got something VFH worthy here.
||--Cap'n Sir Ben GUN WotM VFH VFP 06:54, 20 July 2007 (UTC)