Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews: Studies reveal that weight-loss can be achieved with this one simple trick (quick)
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Would love some reviews of this article I just (like, literally in the last few minutes) wrote and uploaded.
Thanks, and heres a direct link: http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/Studies_reveal_that_weight-loss_can_be_achieved_with_this_one_simple_trick.
Hankjones 14:10, December 11, 2011 (UTC)
|Humour:||9||It's great, and it's about f**ing time that stupid internet ad got its comeuppance. It's missing something, though. Can't put my finger on it.|
|Concept:||10||Again, I'm all for bashing stupid internet ads (especaially ones that are so widespread), and I only wished I had thought of it first.|
|Prose and formatting:||8||I think what it's missing, is that the prose needs to be tightened up, and some sub-headers put in. That would make the humour more punchy.|
|Images:||7||More images could help also.|
|Miscellaneous:||9||This is just my grading of the piece generally.|
|Final Score:||43||Overall, a great piece. Could use some tightening, but a real cracker of a concept.|
|Reviewer:||Phrank Psinatra 11:32, December 25, 2011 (UTC)|