Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews: Democrats create skateboard company
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Okay, another one from the humor monsters that form tribbuca222.
Tribbuca222 21:24, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
|Humour:||2||Hi, Tribbuca! Even though you are likely not reading this due to your ban, I'll take a look at it, because I'm just that helpful.
Ok, I strongly suggest you read and reread HTBFANJS, especially the parts about random humor and outright bias. Many of the references (e.g., your mom) and the random large number detract highly. I did not laugh at all whilst reading this, partially because of the presence of only bias and no humor.
|Concept:||4||3/5 for idea, as I could see that this idea could be done well. 1/5 for execution. See above.|
|Prose and formatting:||2||The prose is absolutely killing this article. ALL THE CAPITAL LETTERS and f%@$ing swearing are visually distracting and therefore detract from the article. See the part about crass language in HTBFANJS, it would be a real help. Also, the tone is not a professional tone, like I would expect from a UnNews article. While this is not necessarily a bad thing and has been done well in other unnews articles I have read in the past, there is no identified speaker. If you want to do a news article in an unprofessional tone, you should identify the speaker and let us (the reader) know why the writer is writing this way. Other than that, I found some spelling errors here, so please check your spelling.|
|Images:||3||The lone picture on this page is quite random and does not relate to anything previously stated in the article. It is also not funny to randomly stick the word "gay" in something without context.|
|Final Score:||13.8||I strongly suggest HTBFANJS, I usually read it once a week just to remind me. Good luck |
|Reviewer:||You know what the music means... Our time is up. 20:24, 7 May 2009 (UTC)|
User has been banned for a year. I don't know if that should effect whether or not this gets reviewed, but I call not it. --18:32, 7 May 2009 (UTC)