Hey Fellow UnNews Reporters!
Tell me whatcha think of this story! Thx!
Smuggler 23:11, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
The article is not very funny. I mean, the quote from Phat was not entertaining, and the fact that "dong" is funny isn't either. The article is not funny at all, to make my point clearer. I didn't laugh, smile, half smile, or even think about almost half of a quarter smiling the whole article.
The concept is really hard to work on, because there is not a lot of room for real jokes. The article is done pretty well considering how little room there is on the subject, but still, not a very good concept.
Prose and formatting:
The formatting is OK, but not the best. The biggest problem here is the size of the first picture. It takes up jsut about half of the writing room. UnNews recommends that the image is 350px at the most, and this one hits 400. Not too much over, but considering the size of the entire image, way too big. It makes it look like your article has content, but infact, there isn't much.
The images are not really funny, and like I said above, they take up most of the room. Not to mention you have two images. That is too many considering the sze of the actual "article". When I make som UnNews, I only use one image usually, but when the article gets long enough I use two. And I keep them at relatively decent sizes.
This article is not very good, but not horrible, eaither. I would put a fix template on it, but it's an UnNews, and it's either live or die. I would almost go with die here, but it barely scratches its way to survival in my book.