this one was an aristocrat's turkey day ball entry, and turned into a big disappointment (did not place). anyway, thought i'd get a review to see if i can make it more good and stuff. --SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 06:09, 23 December 2007 (UTC)
Witty, funny. Loved the bit about the Justice Jackpot. But that latter half of the article is really the funny part. Try to add some more jokes to the first half, you're losing people there.
Racist humor is the best kind. Great idea for an article. The link to the original Yahoo article is broken, so I can't find it. I would have liked to read that as well.
Prose and formatting:
The writing itself was okay. That last sentence just seems out of place to me, I don't know why. There are other iffy lines here and there, but overall it sounds pretty professional.
Good images, they definitely add to the article. The first one is especially excellent, but I didn't really get the caption on the second one. Well, I got it, I just didn't think it was funny.
Avg'd. Look, a penis! 8====D
Great article, but I hate to say that I can see how it wouldn't place at the Aristocrat's Ball. It's short and sweet, it just needs a little more love and I would say that this is VFH material. I'll gladly review it again if you make some improvements.