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edit UnNews:Obama dog choice named

I just want to know how it is. I know beggars can't be choosers, but only people who get the joke (Like that this dog thing has been on the front page several times, in relation to the other stuff going on.) review please. Thanks very much.

Lord Serioch 07:14, 14 January 2009 (UTC) :I'll get it in the morning, (or early afternoon your time if your in Europe, or this evening if your in Australia). Overall, its a fairly good unNews article. Its sort of a one-trick pony (most unNews is), but it avoids rambling, beating the joke to death, and being too short.--Mnbvcxz 07:59, 14 January 2009 (UTC)

Ok, change of plans. I nominated it on VFH, as its too time sensitive to wait to nominate it. I would rate it as a very good (but not quite great) unNews article. However, I tend not to "get" unNews, so its probably well above average.

For advice, I'd say probably leave as is, you don't want to risk rambling. If you feel the need to add more content, I would suggest explaining more about why Obama made the decision. I'd avoid adding more "reactions to" material, that can degenerate into filibustering and "name-dropping" easily.

Since its on VFH, and I did a "fly-by" review, I don't think a full review by me will help you much. I'll leave it for someone else to do. --Mnbvcxz 08:38, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
I concur with the concept that the dog pick is a completely irrelevant topic. I would advise pursuing this point with links to prominent newspapers (e.g. Chicago Tribune) to help people who might not get the joke that this is indeed considered a real news story by real news organizations (if any exist these days). One complaint: Making the article entirely deadpan, especially early on, in a way beats a horse which has already long been dead (for lack of better words). Try expanding the satire immediately within the first two paragraphs, if not for the fact that most readers will have moved on after the first two boring sentences and missed the actual funniness which exists in the rest of the article. thx (and don't hate me!) Projectjulio 19:28, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
Humour: 5 The idea of the dog decision being the most important one is not emphasized enough.
Concept: 9 The concept of the dog decision being the most important presidential decision is good. So is the idea of Al-Qaeda declaring a jihad on dogs.
Prose and formatting: 7 Formatting isn't bad for an Unnews article. I did detect some minor spelling errors though. Has necessary internal links.
Images: 7 Should have an image showing the president and the dog together, or at least some humor involving the images.
Miscellaneous: 7 A decent Unnews article, but probably not a feature.
Final Score: 35
Reviewer: -- Simsilikesims(♀UN) Talk here. 15:40, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
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