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edit UnNews:Malaysian Leader claims 9/11 is staged

Sakai4eva 04:25, January 21, 2010 (UTC) is back, this time with news. It was hilarious enough in itself, but he couldn't resist the temptation to spice it up a little.

The Pole, who can't speak English, takes it! PoliszSir Ptok-BentonicznyPisz tutaj KUN 13:13, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks. Just so you know, I'm Malaysian, and I'm more offended by the real news than I'll ever be with the UnNews. I "sugarcoated" it so that it doesn't sound like a too biased article. I'd still take you critiques into my next article. --Sakai4eva 14:49, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
Humour: 9 Sentence by sentence. First of all I expected old good joke with linking the city mentioned at the beginning to some less or more related site,e.g Kuala Lumpur would link to Koala Bear or something like that, but you didn't do it. No problem. Next - starts nice with a question. then you nicely describe Malaysian. It's not too offending and that's good. You woud (in theory) offend Malaysia but it wouldn't look appropriately. Comparing 9/11 to avatar - priceless. Then spoofed "Citation needed" tag - made me laugh a bit. I liked also Na'vi living in Malaysian jungle. Awesome joke was with a reference about studying. I liked the way Malaysian citiziens cried about "history is fake". Also mentioning Holocaust Denial was in the right place. Then nice turnaround - seems he actually praised America for good filmmaking. News had nice finish with mentioning Barack Obama and blaming him. Blaming Obama is trendy right now so it was a good ending.

To not sugarcoat, I would add some sentences about "Why does he think 9/11 was faked". I know you wrote about avatar but you would add some statements he "gave" to prove his point of view. E.g. "Everybody saw 9/11 in TV, I don't know anybody who saw it live" etc. Of course they should be a bit senseless.

Concept: 9 Nice concept, I like seeing retardness of world's politicians. Especially that exoctic like Malaysian or Zimbabwean.
Prose and formatting: 10 Really good news alike prose. I think nothing should be changed there.
Images: 10 There is only one image but it's good one. It doesn't have to be extremely funny. Short news = 1 image. it has nice caption and reference. What else is needed? nothing.
Miscellaneous: 9.5 I think that's an appropriate mark for this article
Final Score: 47.5 Nice UnNews. Short and adequate. Nice job.
Reviewer: PoliszSir Ptok-BentonicznyPisz tutaj KUN 13:34, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
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