Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Ick, broccoli for dinner, AGAIN!
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Not one of mine, but I found this in Recent Changes, loved it, and touched it up. I think it deserves recognition; let's see what y'all think. --05:55, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
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- I fixed up the page a little, so this score is based on the page afterwards. • <-> 11:37, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
|Humour:||7||avg of all paragraphs
above average introduction, and I like where this is going.
This section is dry but interesting. I like interesting, but I wish it had funny in it, too.
Well, the broccoli has turned slightly stale. It's not as over-the-top as I wish it had been.
|Concept:||8||Good concept (a kid at a dinner table complaining about broccoli), however it does not exaggerate the situation enough. It just kinda sits there, tells a little story, and then falls asleep.|
|Prose and formatting:||5||Adequate formatting after I fixed it up. It had 4 templates on the same page! However, it's really too short for honors.|
|Images:||7||The pictures are adequate.|
|Miscellaneous:||6.8||avg of all your other scores.|
|Final Score:||33.8||Try to lengthen this article. Keep going with having a narrator, but I want it to really sell the idea that broccoli is the worst thing ever.|
|Reviewer:||• <-> 11:49, 10 November 2007 (UTC)|