Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:GM purchases Indian languages

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edit Unnews:GM purchases Indian languages

Humour: 8 I like it, some smart humor, and some really nice lines.
Concept: 7 I like the idea. Consider changing the title to "Native American" though - when I saw this, I thought it may be a riff on outsourcing jobs to India - "now that we own the language, our competitors can't use it, so they can't take advantage of the cheap labor" announced a GM spokesman - that kind of thing. But I prefer this concept.
Prose and formatting: 6 It's not badly written, but formatting is an area where it falls down - add some links to other articles, and some images at least. See the How To link on that handy ICU box added at the foot of the page.
Images: 0 There aren't any. Add at least one. A Native American with a really intimidating stare would work well with the penultimate line.
Miscellaneous: 6 This is definitely an above average Un-News article. I like the concept and so forth. Add images and links, and it will be even better.
Final Score: 27 If you're after highlight, it might need more work, I think. But if you're looking to create an amusing article that definitely fits well on this site, well done!
Reviewer: --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 12:03, 15 October 2007 (UTC)

Having said that, I can't come up with many suggestions right now, which is a bit annoying! If you want to do more with this and want some further thoughts, give me a nudge on my talk page, and I'll try to help. It's a good start to your Uncyc life though! --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 12:03, 15 October 2007 (UTC)

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