Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:GLAAD demands apology from WoW Kid for defamation
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Bl888 13:56, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
I'll pee on this. I'm really sorry you had to wait so long to get a Pee Review! Don't take it personally but we have a really big backlog. DAP Dame Pleb Com. Miley Spears (talk) 00:09, September 9, 2009 (UTC)
|Humour:||5||First it's great that you did an article! I see this is your only edit except asking for a Pee Review, which is unusual. See your talk page for your welcome that has links to a lot of good information. Please understand that I'm reviewing this by a "perfect" standard. 50 points is totally perfect. Even some feature articles score in the high 30s, and of course this is just my opinion! There are thousands of articles here that never get featured, so don't expect that on your first try! I didn't get it on mine.
Parts of your article are very funny! But your article is very short, only five mini paragraphs. You really could use more for a full article. Your joke, "Not only that, but it also gives us a reason to stay in the media cycle" is similar to one I just did in an article I wrote, so naturally I think it's funny! But really that's the first line I found funny and it's half way through. You might want to add more humor. I like "He then tried to use a brick to smash the camera but failed even to break the lens cap." It's like the brother is epic fail. "Squirrels United Against Defamation" I find a funny name, but to really get the joke you have to see the video.
You might want to describe the video more, or at least your made-up version of it. You can keep with your writing style, which works very well. You might want to have something about YouTube's made-up response to the protest. Also usually gay jokes aren't very funny because they're largely the same, but you made it work, so that's very good.
I think you need more jokes, which is why you got a score of 5. If you had more jokes as good as the ones you have, I'd give the article humor an 8! But the article needs more.
|Concept:||7||I like the idea of GLAAD taking something that's pretty stupid very seriously. That really fits Uncyclopedia. But I think you could develop your concept more|
|Prose and formatting:||8||I really like your writing! I enjoyed your style because it sounds like a real news article. I think that's the strongest part of your article. But you might want to write more. What specifically upset GLAAD beyond just using "gay" as an insult? Were they asked why they chose to protest this video instead of thousands of others that use "gay" as a put down? How offended were they? What did somebody else, like an attorney, say? This is really minor, but GLAAD is Gay & Lesbian Alliance Against Defamation so you might want to fix the name. Also you could say what WoW is. Remember not everybody who reads your article will watch the video. But keep writing like this just add more jokes.|
|Images:||0||Don't worry about the zero. I have to give you a 0 because there's no picture. It really doesn't need more than one, but one would be good. It could be the older brother, or maybe someone who looks like an attorney for GLAAD.|
|Miscellaneous:||7||I gave you 7 because I think it's a good article, it just needs more.|
|Final Score:||27||I really liked your writing! I'd rate your writing style very highly and feel it's very good for an UnNews article. It just needs to be longer with more jokes like the ones you have. It's a great start and I want to see much more from you!|
|Reviewer:||DAP Dame Pleb Com. Miley Spears (talk) 01:15, September 9, 2009 (UTC)|