Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Double Amputee Allowed to Compete in Ass-Kicking Contest

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Ray Bob McCobb 01:25, 17 May 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 8.5 Well, I will honestly say that this was one helluva funny article. Having read the original article (regarding him not being allowed to race in the Olympics), I can honestly say you put in a very decent satire. I enjoyed the placement of “Ass-Kicking” over running, and the light jab at our imbecile-in-chief was well done. From what I am seeing, this article seems to be nothing but a re-write of the real article. Simply meaning, I believe you replaced one word with the term “Ass-kicking”, which hurt this score a bit
Concept: 9 I wish I could say I thought of this idea before you, but I didn’t. The delivery of this article followed a serious tone, almost making me believe that there is an ass-kicking contest in the Olympics.
Prose and formatting: 9 While your prose was, overall, all right, your main problem was with the links.While any article has the right to a red link, four red links begins to look a bit untidy. I did notice in the history that this article was touched up, which I strongly believe helped the prose and formatting. Aside from that, your grammar is mighty fine, and the language format follows an understandable and believable format. My other complaint is this section of text “"Handicapped strike back at the workd of sport, who made sport of them all these yeart” sounds EXTREMLY awkward, and the grammatical structure seems somewhat butchered.
Images: 7 Well, the image certainly was not bad, and given the small size of the article, I only would have expected one image. The caption (labeling George W. Bush as an “Ass-Kicker” was well laid in, a jab at the president we all love to hate. While I would normally discourage jokes about something we all joke about, I believe that this particular joke was well placed, and worth keeping. The image itself was fine and dandy, and I can’t think of a way to improve it.
Miscellaneous: 8.3 Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines
Final Score: 41.8 This is one ass-kicking article you have going on in here. While humour is a purely subjective score, I think this article is ready for the front page, BUT some work has to be done before you get too excited. You need to
  1. See if you can get this article to be a fresh article rather than a replace-one-specific-word article.
  2. Fix the mangled grammar in the “Source”
  3. Pat yourself on the back for such an excellent article.
Reviewer: Warm Regards, Javascap
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