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edit UnNews:Defending champions, Philadelphia Phillies, already lose bid for playoffs

JackOfSpades, I like to think of myself as a freelancer 02:09, 12 April 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 6 It was funny, but a lot of the jokes were baseball jokes that only baseball fans would get. Paticularly NL East fans. Like the joke about the Nationals, who would get that besides baseball fans? Although it is funny if you are a baseball fan.
Concept: 8.5 Concept was fine. Infact it was a great idea, but just take my advice above, and make it simpiler to get. You should probably include more about what happened to the Phillies during the Rockies game. And remember to tell who exactly Jimmy Rollins is. One more thing: Charlie Manuel is the Phillies' manager, not GM.
Prose and formatting: 7 You should probably get rid of the redlinks and then it would be fine. I didn't find any problem here except for the redlinks which I find annoying. They distract the reader from the content.
Images: 7 Images were good, but nothing special. Maybe could of used more. Also, don't be afraid to spend more time on the captions. Good caption jokes make an article much better.
Miscellaneous: 7.1 Averging with Template:Pee.
Final Score: 35.6 Overall, this was a good article and just fix what I said above and you should be fine.
Reviewer: MercenarylordEnter if you dare 16:38, 12 April 2009 (UTC)

Thanks very much!--JackOfSpades 20:35, 12 April 2009 (UTC)

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