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edit UnNews:Bill Clinton supports Barack Obama

It's tidy, but the question: is it funny? I think so.

The lady doth protest to much, methinks.

Ah, shut up.

--Vana 01:57, 18 May 2008 (UTC)

I'll get this done for you a little later, i'm just too tierd at this moment.Have Fun! MuCal. Orian57|Chat|Chuckle|PEE List|Awarded|UnBlog|Icons-flag-gbOrian57 05:12, 19 May 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 6 This did make me chuckle but even for an UnNews article it was a little short. It needs expansion but there is plenty to work with here.

You could expand your idea of Hillary becoming Republican and explain some of the ramifications of this. Also you don’t have any “interviews”. Interview people; get the opinion from the average Joe, but be sure to make it funny. You could also have Bill’s Mistress show her support for Hillary. Or something. Just expand it a little to add some more humour.

What you already have is very funny though.

Concept: 8 nice and original (I think) and also one of those “almost believable” absurdities. Kudos.
Prose and formatting: 7 The bolded words should have the city and the state as per norm. Also like I said length was a bit of an issue.

You also appear to have a couple of references (the little numbers) that aren’t referenced properly:

<ref>witty foot note</ref>

And then at the bottom of the article put:


Everything else (spelling, grammar, sentencing et al) seemed fine though.

Images: 6 The first is funny (implying the common criticism that Obama is too young) and the second one is kind of meh (but the caption and it's relevancy saves it) but as the article is there are just too many. If you expand I’d suggest making the first image a little smaller and having it on the right and the second on the left. Just so it looks nice basically.
Miscellaneous: 6.75 (averaged other fields)
Final Score: 33.75 If you’d like to thank/insult/ask me about anything please visit my talk page.
Reviewer: Have Fun! MuCal. Orian57|Chat|Chuckle|PEE List|Awarded|UnBlog|Icons-flag-gbOrian57 15:07, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
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