Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:'Tedward' remembered by Caroline Kennedy
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- Gosh, nobody's reviewed this for you yet? I'll have a go. Should be here within 24 hours. WHY???PuppyOnTheRadio 09:47, October 1, 2009 (UTC)
|Humour:||6.5||I like to start my reviews with telling about me and whatever knowledge I may or may not have about the subject of an article. I'm still new here, but I did receive a Golden Shower Award from a Reviewer of the Month and was named Noob of the Month for September 2009. So obviously I know everything. Seriously, of course this is just my opinion. As for the topic, I'm fairly familiar with the Kennedy family, and somewhat with Caroline, and did look at her article on Wikipedia after I read this Uncyclopedia article. But I did not hear her actual speech.
I definitely liked parts of the article, and found them funny and witty. But of course I have suggestions for improvement. Otherwise, a Pee Review would be rather pointless, right?
This article, you know, has Caroline, like, saying you know a lot, you know? You know, of course, that she has been criticized, you know, for saying you know a lot. And repetition, you know, is a valid humor technique like, you know. But in this case, you know, maybe, you know, it's a bit much, you know.
As an example, when I saw the movie Bill & Ted's Excellent Adventure, it seemed like the pair was constantly saying "excellent." But I counted, and if I remember correctly (I probably don't) the word was used I think 23 times in 90 minutes. That means it was only used an average of about once every 4 minutes. I think you can get the idea across quite well while using much fewer "you knows."
I'm dividing my comments to match the article's paragraphs.
|Concept:||7||I find the concept rather limited, Caroline saying you know a lot and smoking pot and having sex. But she is a Baby Boomer, and we do know that's what all Baby Boomers did in the 1960s and 1970s. But you really don't need a high concept for an unnews article, so I think it works.|
|Prose and formatting:||6||I largely covered this in the humor section. I think there's some very good stuff here, but it's somewhat lost in the "you knows."|
|Images:||6||I think the image is all right, but the caption doesn't do much for me. Perhaps if you found an image where Tedward's at a party or at least smiling it might fit the article better. The article portrays him a partier, but the image doesn't.|
|Miscellaneous:||6.5||More or less an average of the above.|
|Final Score:||32||I think as an UnNews article, this will work fine with some edits. I'm sorry no one reviewed this before now. Hopefully some others will help catch up on the backlog, but now that many people have gone back to college it may take a while. Thanks for your work and please post a note on my talk page if you edit it.|
|Reviewer:||WHY???PuppyOnTheRadio 19:34, October 1, 2009 (UTC)|