Looking to get a few things answered. Is the length good, or should I add another section or two? Does my wording/language stay consistant throughout, and is there anywhere where the wording gets bogged down? Ummmm..... I think that might be it. Oh, and funny of course. WoodyOnFire!Talking WoodyStalking Woody 14:21, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
The tone is simply too serious in some parts, while the overall story has a lot of funny potential, there aren't many witty one-liners that would add to the humor factor.
This is a very good idea.
Prose and formatting:
Jesus would probably be just a tad more intelligent sounding. And you ramble on occassion (not badly).
Your pictures and comments are very good.
It just needs to be a bit wittier, more jokes in general.